I could not see the video but heard the sound. The dialogues were very nice, and good communication skills found in both of you. 画像が見れたらもっとよかったですが、メイが見られているようなので、私側の問題だとも思います。内容はよかったです！

Rin and Ayana, well done. Rin is so sweet in both role-plays and Ayana is playing a good friend role, very nice. Both goodbyes are spoken appropriately. Good job.